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Carol O's avatar

Recondite! Exactly ! Looked it up and sure enough abstruse, esoteric, obscure!

Love trading emotions and vistas !

Fill your day dear one! This is ours to Be ~

Carol O's avatar

Hope your day is at peace if that’s what you desire.

Appears to be my most sought internal prayer

Yesterday a friend came to my door, persisting, tho my admission was lagging

Being unclothed takes time to wrap full on

the day was long past noon.

Her worry slackened, too many brief words flowing

With eyes anxious surveying disarray throughout

A heavy beribboned golden box rejected unopened

No candy can deliver my heart and soul to peace in this time Compounding daily,

unfilled needs of neighbors, villages, countryside strewn with remnants of hope, promise

Carol O's avatar

I think I’d like you to continue the ‘story’ in this poem. The place, the tone, is set. There’s more activity, possibly waiting for you to uncover.

Martin Agius's avatar

I think you're right. the poem is not finished.

I am very much a formalist, believing in certain things

regarding the use of language.

Martin Agius's avatar

You wrote a poem, right there